Chuck leaned against the blade of the backhoe, clearly nervous. “They didn’t say nothing about it being no graveyard, Donnie.”
“Oh, the tough guy is afraid of ghosts now? Gimme a fucking break.”
“It’s bad luck is all.”
Donnie lit a Kool. “The man paid you to do a job, not for your opinion about what’s lucky. Get into your goddamn machine and get started. The dump trucks are on the way. Slab’s being poured tomorrow.”
“But what about the bodies? Under the slab?”
Donnie laughed. “They ain’t going nowhere. It’ll be nice and dark and peaceful. Get to work.”
Nice fellow is Donnie. Great voices here and a lot said in a few words.
I am sure this has happened before. There was a story about old graves being discovered recently under New York. If I were these guys I would worry about being cursed or haunted.
Nicely done. Characters shine through every sentence.
Many a grave lies buried more than once. Well done.
And so another episode of poultergeist begins.
Such heartlessness, but you captured the voice beautifully!
A real sinister edge here, with realistic, sharp dialogue. I like it!
Nice one, I liked the dialogue.