I watch her through the window, smiling at people like nothing happened.
Like the love between us never existed. Like I’d never even existed.
And it was love.
It’s hard to look at her, even from far away. That smile she gives when she hands people back their change, like she’s giving them a special gift.
She smiled that way at me when I came in. Those white teeth and blue eyes, blue as the sky.
Made me feel like something.
Now she acts like she doesn’t know me, like she never cared.
Oh, she’ll care all right.
She’ll care.
Now you have got me worried for her.?
I’m with Michael on this one….
This sounds like the prequel to J Hardy Carroll’s story this week….
I once shared a jail cell with him. He snores something often. But he and I sometimes collaborate.
Exactly, it must be some bad pizza people are killing each other.
You’ve done a very good job of creating suspense. Sounds rather Raymond Chandler-ish.
Revenge is a dish best served with a smile and blue eyes.
Oh, my goodness! Now we know why J. Hardy Carroll’s cashier was shot! It all ties together! 🙂
Very well done. Tis a man scorned.
ooh ominous
I hope he changes his mind.
Oh dear. She’s for it D:
You portray very well that bristling resentment that goes with being dumped and seeing the perpetrator of your misery happily getting on with their life without you.
Very dark. I could feel his seething building.
Uh Oh! Create suspense piece
Great*
I almost feel sorry for him.
Oh dear, someone’s in trouble! Scary.Well done:)
Chilling ending! She needs to watch her back.
What a threat in that final line. I don’t think this story will end well for her. Good writing.
Scary end! Brilliantly written.
Sounds like a dangerous stalker. Well portrayed glimpse into ‘rape culture’ thinking. The man feels she is responsible for his misinterpreted feelings.