Photo by Dale Rogerson
Sher’f come by and tell me we got another maybe gone missing in the bog, asks if the county can rent my fanboat again. I tell him I got fishing planned. I always tell him that. Drives up the price.
This time it must be somebody important because he pays my price right off, no dickering. I go to the boathouse and pull her out. Sher’f and his man bring the poles and chain like always.
There’s this little girl, too. She’s trying not to cry, holding herself together. I don’t ask her name, just give her a life jacket.
Oh, what a story. I like the casualness of your MC, makes it that more powerful.
Powerful story.
That was a very sad and powerful story — the narrative voice is very real, very oblique, pragmatic, yet compassionate.
That’s a great voice here. It really brings the reader into the story and although you don’t give away what is happening, the reader can guess.
-David
Tremendous impact. And a really believable character you have here.
Sad the little girl had to come along. I take it, it was a family member or she witnessed something.
Oh, that sucked me in. Disturbingly good 🙂
Ouch. Toss in a kid for more impact, big meanie!
It feels to me like this guys part of the “gone missing racket”.