promises promises.
the way he explained it sounded easy.
another city another name
a fresh start away
no more of the snake eating its tail
billy, he don’t ask questions
too young I expect
to miss any of this
but the kid surprised me
with his memory
called us by our old name
more than once after I told him
he must never ever
he missed the old apartment
he said
missed his old room and toy cars
I’ll get you new cars I said
better than those old ones
you can play all day and not even miss them
A touching story of life on the edge, life in hiding. Poor Billy. New cars (if indeed he receives them) are no substitute for a stable loving family. I like the stream of consciousness narrative achieved by eliminating punctuation.
For me this captures the moment it time where the full impact of life has not yet been realised.
Firstly I am with Penny on this narrative, in this case it was good to see no punctuation…Is someone fleeing a misdemeanour, or has mother stolen the mobs cash..
Pain and discomfort of moving to a new place. Nice!
On the run written as free verse poetry. Sad for the kid, and the life they have to live under the radar.
Yes I got the feeling it was a family who had assumed new identities, whether to flee violence, abuse, or the hit man. You can change the name but you can’t change the memories. Love the voice, or the wondering parent, worried the kid might give it all away…
Looks like the family is in hiding and the young one can give the game away. Nice one.
It is always a treat to come across a FF poetry, especially this good.
Poor uprooted child. Toys are no compensation for once-familiar surroundings and security.
I love you how set this up…. makes the read more meaningful….
Oh boy. You’ve stirred some memories. My parents weren’t hiding, but we did move a lot when I was a kid. Something I treasured seemed to disappear with each move.Being “the new girl” so often was NOT exciting and romantic.
Very touching.
A transient life of a child, very sad, shallow roots soon die and are forgotten as one moves on.
Nice take on the prompt.