Pain. At first, just that. Pain. Blood in my mouth. Eyes gummy with it.
As it starts to get light, my surroundings begin to clear. The train yard. I must have fell from that bridge above.
No, not fell. Dropped. I remember now. A little.
I can see my hand now, curled on the steel rail. It looks all right, but I can’t move it.
What else? My legs seem to be bending the wrong way. The right one looks like it has two knees.
My ear is pressed against the cold steel rail. I feel it start to thrum.
Well-crafted and grizzly
ooo, not a good morning, I suppose.
Not a good place to be.
OY!
From bad to worse for that guy. A harrowing tale.
That’s what you call a rude awakening.
Eesh… not a way to want to wake up…
Horror show. The ending of an episode of “The Twilight Zone,” or more aptly, “Alfred Hitchcock Presents,” both TV shows I watched in the 1960s.
What a great start to a novel this would be. Who is he? Who dropped him? What did he DO? Readers want to know!
Love it and particularly ‘Eyes gummy with it’. Tense and physically gripping piece.
Nasty, what a story opener
Now that’s what a call a particularly horrible opener. Great exposition of good writing skills.
Wow, that’s quite a scene. A dream…hopefully.
…when I grow up! My tale.
I agree this is a well written dark start to a larger piece.